Inside The Room


I clung tightly to Richard’s arm as we entered the gray-tiled room.

“Are you ready?” asked the officer.

I took a deep breath, then nodded.

He whipped back the sheet, exposing the battered face.

Richard started to cry, but in the confusion one thought sustained me: Not her.

Author’s Note: This micro-fiction is written in response to Lillie McFerrin’s weekly challenge to write a ‘Five Sentence Fiction’ (found here). The word for this week’s challenge is ‘confusion.’

About Kate Loveton

Aspiring novelist. Avid reader of fiction. Reviewer of books. By day, my undercover identity is that of meek, mild-mannered legal assistant, Kate Loveton, working in the confines of a stuffy corporate law office; by night, however, I'm a super hero: Kate Loveton, Aspiring Novelist and Spinner of Tales. My favorite words are 'Once upon a time... ' Won't you join me on my journey as I attempt to turn a hobby into something more?
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28 Responses to Inside The Room

  1. Julia Lund says:

    A whole story conjured with so few words.

  2. Only five sentences, but so much power and meaning behind them.

    Excellent stuff, Kate! ❀

  3. Brilliant piece in so few words!

  4. Loved it! Just about all I have time to read at the moment. No long novels for me 😦

  5. Bravo, Kate. Hope no one ever has to experience this!

  6. Bruce Goodman says:

    WOW! Wonderful!

  7. sknicholls says:

    Such drama in so few words. Excellent!

  8. willow1945 says:

    Wow, Kate, well done! The way you are able to tell a story in so few words never ceases to amaze me πŸ™‚

  9. stacilys says:

    Another post with a punch. Wonderful Kate.

  10. Brevity isn’t only the soul of wit, it can be the soul of drama, too, when handled as well as this.
    Top class. Kate!
    My best to you

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