The Man with the Good Heart


Rotund and jolly, George Hurt always greeted friends and neighbors with a booming laugh and a funny story.

On Sunday mornings, George and his wife attended the Water Street Baptist Church, where George cooed over newborns, sang hymns with gusto, and gave generously when the collection plate was passed. He treated his pastor with hearty reverence, fervently professed his love of Jesus, and was known to slip quarters to the sons and daughers of his friends.

George was a good man with a good heart. Everyone said so.

Everyone except George’s quiet wife, who wore long-sleeved shirts even in summer.

Β© All Rights Reserved Kate Loveton and Odyssey of a Novice Writer

Word Count: 100
Note ~ Story written in response to Violet Verbosity’s 100 Word Challenge. The challenge was to write a story of 100 words or less using the word ‘reverence.’ Violet’s challenge can be found here.

About Kate Loveton

Aspiring novelist. Avid reader of fiction. Reviewer of books. By day, my undercover identity is that of meek, mild-mannered legal assistant, Kate Loveton, working in the confines of a stuffy corporate law office; by night, however, I'm a super hero: Kate Loveton, Aspiring Novelist and Spinner of Tales. My favorite words are 'Once upon a time... ' Won't you join me on my journey as I attempt to turn a hobby into something more?
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29 Responses to The Man with the Good Heart

  1. Sounds about right–people can be a paragon of virtue, no one ever suspecting that inside lurks a bastard, with only their immediate family knowing the true person. Kate, you ought to write a follow up where his wife kills him. And of course, no one would suspect that meek, little woman. πŸ˜€

  2. Wow, this story sure packs a punch, Kate ❀

    It is so often true that families in which abuse is rife are particularly adept at hiding it. Your story uses only 100 words yet its meaning speaks volumes.

    Fantastic work, Kate ❀

  3. nimi naren says:

    Lovely Kate…most times things are not what they seem.

  4. Julia Lund says:

    So much said in so few words – Long sleeves in summer. Full of impact.

  5. noelleg44 says:

    Wow! That last line was a real zinger! Good, good, good job!

  6. jan says:

    Well done! I think this may be one of your best!

  7. How do you fight a monster with two faces?
    Hard not to like a guy like this, isn’t it. Impressive writing, Kate. That last line is golden. ❀ ❀ ❀

    • Kate Loveton says:

      Thank you, Tess. I like looking at things not as they appear to be, but as they might be. Everyone thinks this guy is just a swell and generous fellow; he’s really not. He saves his agression for those closest to him.

      I liked your question. Indeed, how do you fight a monster with two faces? I suspect the wife believes no one would believe her – and she’s likely to be a timid soul who wouldn’t risk disclosure.

      Thanks for reading – and for the generous comment. ❀

      • This is so true to life it’s icky. Happens. No-one know what goes on behind closed doors and the wife has been brainwashed to believe she is worthless and no-one will believe her. As well, she may very well be embarrassed and not only hurt. Grrr. ❀
        I enjoy your stories, Kate, and you are more than welcome.

  8. macjam47 says:

    That last line said a lot. So sad that this happens more often than people think, even in the best of homes.

    • Glynis Jolly says:

      macjam47, yep, it does happen in the homes of those you don’t suspect. Although I do wear short sleeves, I’m married to an extrovert too. With me being more of an introvert, it is challenging sometimes.

    • Kate Loveton says:

      We never truly know what goes on behind closed doors, do we? Even in the best of homes. Even in the most ‘religious’ of families. I suspect that’s why we are all amazed and puzzled when confronted with the news that a neighbor or a work colleague committed a horrendous crime. You continually hear the remark, “He seemed like a nice guy, a normal fellow.” We live so close to each other in today’s modern age, and yet we know even less about one another than we did in the past.

      Thanks for reading, Michelle. πŸ™‚

      • Kate Loveton says:

        Glynis, thanks for leaving a comment. My husband is more of an extrovert than I am, too. Generally, that works well. When I want to back out of a conversation with others, he’s willing to step in. I like that – it allows me to sit back and observe! (I think that’s the writer in me!)

  9. Oh, this stung at the end. Good job.

  10. That’s a total WOW story. Wish I’d written it… Wish I’d thought of it. Frightening…

  11. So telling in its silent way. So sadly true.

  12. Such a telling last line. Well done Kate.

    • Kate Loveton says:

      I was hoping the last line would sum up the point of the story – that things aren’t always what they seem. It seems to have worked. One hundred words forces brevity, and I wanted to pack some punch into the story with that last line.

  13. Superbly told, Kate. Sadly, it could be true of so many people.

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