Just ten minutes! Please!
Waking abruptly, I’m bewildered by the light spilling through the window. What time is it, I wonder, looking past Joe to the clock on the nightstand.
Nine o’clock! He’ll be late for school!
Tossing on my robe, I hurry to Tommy’s room.
Once there, I pause, watching particles of dust dancing in sunlight. Above the bed, a grim Luke Skywalker stares at me.
Mom, please let me sleep ten more minutes…
“Jean?” Behind me, Joe looks confused.
“I heard something…”
“Oh, Jean,” he says, eyes sad.
Gently pulling me away, he closes the door behind us.
© 2015 All Rights Reserved Kate Loveton, Odyssey of a Novice Writer
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Note: Written in response to the ‘100 Word Challenge for Grown Ups’ sponsored by Julia’s Place (found here). This week’s prompt was to use the phrase ‘please let me sleep’ in a story consisting of 100 words or less.
Odyssey of a Novice Writer 
Wow. Just wow.
Stunning ❤
Hi Heather – thank you! I’m always so pleased when you like my work! ❤
I love your work. Always! ❤ ❤ ❤
Aw… the check is in the mail! 😀 ❤
So are the jars of Marmite… 🙂
Seems wrong to ‘like’ this but very powerful words.
Hi Lisa, thank you for reading the story. I appreciate your leaving a comment. 🙂
Painfully sad, but beautifully written.
Hi Margaret, thank you for the kind remark. 🙂
Don’t know what more to add, except well done!
Thanks, Loretta – I appreciate the comment. 🙂
The words not said speak louder then the rest. Wow, Kate. Powerful ❤ ❤ ❤
Thank you, Tess. Glad you liked it! ❤
I did. I D.i.d. ❤
Like derrick, I had to read this twice. Oh so sad, but written on so well Kate.
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Thank you, Staci. Glad you enjoyed. ❤
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Wow. Very powerful. Great job!
Thanks, Jan! Glad you enjoyed the story!
So wonderful and heat-breaking, I read it twice..
Hi Noelle – thank you for the kind words! I struggled with the word count on this one. Unsure whether I had enough words to tell the story. I’m glad it made sense. 🙂
How sad. Grief is so hard to take.
I’m sure there are moments when people – for just a brief second or two – forget the tragedy they’ve endured. A brief moment of normalcy before sad reality takes over. Thanks for reading, Glynis.
Well done! You have a knack to get at heart-strings.
Thank you for the kind comment!
So sad…but nicely done, Kate!
Thanks, Jill. 🙂
Once again, an unexpected ending. I do hope all this sadness comes from your imagination…
Hi Keith. Fortunately, it does spring from my imagination. I try to step into the shoes of the characters. It must be a terrible, terrible thing to lose a child. Thanks for reading – I appreciate it. 🙂
Nice! Missing a son that’s gone. Only ten minutes more with him….Cool.
Thank you, Cindy. 🙂
Well done. Heart-breaking. Been there.
Thank you, Michelle. I’m so sorry that you’ve experienced this. ❤
Noooo …
Beautifully, heart-breakingly done.
Thank you, Julia. ❤
Good one. I had to read it twice before I got it.
One hundred words doesn’t leave much to work with… I had to hint a lot. I’m glad you got it in the end, Derrick, and I appreciate your kindness in reading and commenting on my work. 🙂
Man, this one hurt.
Nice work.
KT
Thanks, friend. Glad you enjoyed.