The first time I met Dorinda she was appearing in Phineas Todd’s Circus of Wonders, sporting an electric crown and tresses that danced like flames about her beautiful face. She was breathtaking, my electrified Dorinda, charming the rubes; charming me as well, and for a good ten years we loved.
Then Stefano, that damned sword-swallowing lothario, joined the show, and one foggy night I followed my traitorous Dorinda behind the big tent and listened to the eager, frenzied sound of a sword being swallowed…
That’s when my beauties paid a surprise visit to the trailer of the two-timing Dorinda, who went to her grave covered in deadly kisses.
My name is Say-ed, the Arabian Snake Charmer, and this is my story.
© 2015 All Rights Reserved Kate Loveton, Odyssey of a Novice Writer
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Note: Written in response to Lillie McFerrin’s “Five Sentence Fiction” (found here). This week’s challenge is to write a story in five sentences utilizing the word “flames.”
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I love this on so many levels! Kudos.
Very very good Kate. I love your short stories. You really should have a book.
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I have to admit that the ‘sound of a sword being swallowed’ line made me laugh out loud in the middle of a public dining area! 🙂
Delicious tale of passion and revenge. Remind me never to date a snake charmer! 🙂
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I knew you’d get a laugh out of that line, Heather. 😀
It takes a snake to charm other snakes, so – yeah – stay away from the snake charmers!
It appealed to my appropriately rude sense of humour, Kate! 🙂 ❤ ❤ ❤
I will just simply say I love it, and leave it at that. 😀
Well, that’s because you’re as twisted as I am. Ain’t it a beautiful thing? 😀
Yes, it is–Twisted Sister. 😀
Oh, you wicked, wicked Kate Loveton! That’s a packed five sentences of revenge, my friend.
😀 It’s fun being wicked occasionally!
Hahaha! “…the eager, frenzied sound of a sword being swallowed…” I honestly lol’ed 🙂
Great use of imagery here too – you say she’s kissed to death before revealing he’s the snake charmer – very effective.
Not too weird at all 🙂
I have to admit, I was lol’ing when I wrote that line!
Glad you liked the imagery; I tried to save the bit about being a snake charmer for last purposely.
Happy you enjoyed it. 🙂
You’re a marvel, Kate.
Aw, thanks, dear Glynis!
Wow..it’s such an wonderful tale in just five sentences 🙂
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Thank you – I’m so pleased you enjoyed it!
Loved this from beginning to end but a verbal “oh wow” came out of me at the ending, I loved it!
Thank you, Mandy, for leaving a comment and letting me know you enjoyed it; I really appreciate that. 🙂
Superb. Another masterclass.
Thank you, Keith! I was in a circus kind of mood when I wrote it. 😀
Very upsetting first thing in the morning
Ah, perhaps, my friend… but better to read in broad daylight than when one is about to turn out the lights, hey? 😀
This is a wonderful story! Forked kisses!
You know, Bruce, when I wrote this one, I thought if anyone would enjoy it, it would be you. Quirky minds, you and I… I mean that in the nicest way, of course! 🙂
Thanks, Kate. That is indeed a compliment!
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Oh my – sly behavior.
Hmm… I always think of snakes as sly creatures. An Arabian snake charmer would have to be sly to have such animals in his command! Thanks for reading, Shari. 🙂
Clever, clever Kate!
Thank you, Noelle! 😀 😀
Yikes! A cautionary tale for the girlfriends of snake charmers, hey? Especially those who can’t resist “frenzied sound of a sword being swallowed.” Lust under the big top!
Jan, you have to wonder who would want to hang out with a Snake Charmer, don’t you? Makes my skin crawl to think about it! As for the sword swallowing, I couldn’t resist… 😀
Very cool tale.
Thanks, pal. Glad you liked it!